I have to admit I did this poem with such haste, it feels so raw and unpolished. Anyway, I want to post this as my poem for today’s rally. I want to know how people will react to my poems if I write ones that are written in such a hurry. I know this may not be as tasteful as the others I’ve posted in the past, but I still wish you enjoy this. wink 🙂
All you could ever want
Is in front of you.
I am anything you want;
I am in front of you
All you could ever need,
I could give to you.
I can give all you need;
I’d give anything for you.
All you could long for
I would give to you only
All you could hope for
You’ll find in me only.
I want to be everything
That you could ever want,
Or possibly ever need,
What you long and hope for.
I will be…..
April 1, 2010 at 10:05 am
until of course you lose yourself in their fantasy never really being you, which is the most special thing you can be…i like it raw and uncut…
April 1, 2010 at 1:50 pm
thanks, brian.,.. and welcome back to being online… 🙂
April 1, 2010 at 5:25 pm
Great uplifting words. Nicely done.
You’ll find mine here.
April 1, 2010 at 8:37 pm
thanks, anthony… 🙂 ill check it out now… 🙂
April 1, 2010 at 5:36 pm
I think the “rawness”of this poem makes it expressive and clear. Powerful.
April 1, 2010 at 8:38 pm
thanks, adam… im glad you found it powerful….
April 1, 2010 at 7:24 pm
raw, exactly how it should be
April 1, 2010 at 8:45 pm
thanks, kokot.. 🙂
April 1, 2010 at 7:43 pm
a lovely poem, nice words of sacrifice and love.
April 1, 2010 at 8:46 pm
thanks, wordwand… glad you liked it… wink
April 1, 2010 at 8:38 pm
Sweet poem!!! Thanks for stopping in and leaving me a sweet comment. 😀 Have a really good day 😀
April 1, 2010 at 8:49 pm
thanks for stopping by too, patty ann… 🙂 i absolutely loved your poem; it was encouraging….
April 1, 2010 at 10:47 pm
for something rushed I think u did a great job, loved it, good rhythm xx
April 2, 2010 at 8:21 am
thanks, william… i really appreciate your encouraging comments… 🙂
April 1, 2010 at 11:03 pm
we always want to to everything everything we have to the ones we love… well written
April 2, 2010 at 8:22 am
yup… most of the time, we want to be their hero, santa clause, and tooth fairy… hehehe
April 2, 2010 at 1:39 am
wonderful promises-lucky recipient.
loved the intensity of love hidden in every word of the poem.
April 2, 2010 at 3:07 am
this one is super smooth and wildly beautiful to me,
raw is cool,
April 2, 2010 at 4:14 am
I love how raw this is! It is so intriguing and the switch from “I am” to “I want to be” is fantastic
April 2, 2010 at 6:35 am
Pick one of your choice from the bottom three,
Thank you for the invaluable contribution to Poets’ Rally.
April 3, 2010 at 10:56 pm
Ishabelle, thanks for visiting and commenting on my blog recently. I’ve been busy with a sick wife. She’s doing much better and I read your beautiful poem to her. She loves it.
I should be back to blogging regularly shortly and I hope to visit here more often.
April 4, 2010 at 11:52 am
I am really sorry to hear that your wife is sick. I hope she gets well soon… 🙂 Best of luck to both of you… :0
April 6, 2010 at 5:17 pm
April 6, 2010 at 10:00 pm
thanks much… 🙂
April 7, 2010 at 12:24 pm
no offence but this rhymes like a music score- very nice!
April 9, 2010 at 8:37 am
i’d like to put notes onto this wonderfully created poem. whaattchaa think? 🙂
April 9, 2010 at 7:57 pm
go go go… 😛